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Man kills himself near a casino in New Orleans
New Orleans - The man found near a lake last night, Allan Grey, shot himself once in the head, according to detectives investigating the killing. This took place at about 02:00h. He was a young man probably about seventeen or eighteen years old.
He was in the casino with his wife, Blanche DuBois. They were dancing. All of a sudden he ran out of the casino. She had no clue and all of a sudden she heard a shot. She later told to the detectives.
She ran to the lake, but everyone tried to keep her away from her dead husband. A witness saw everything, she said that he'd stuck a revolver into his mouth and fired. The back of his head blew away. The witness said she has never seen something like that, she was very shocked.
Rationale
For this week the assigment was to write a news report about the death of Blanche's young lover, Allan Grey, in "A Streetcar named Desire". So I imagined myself being a journalist writing for the New Orleans' newspaper. I used my knowledge about the incident to write the newspaper report. The register of a newspaper is academic language and to inform the reader. So I told what really happened, who were involved, etc.
zondag 28 november 2010
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1. headings are in the present tense, so kills. 2. I am sure the man's name and Blanche's surname would have been included. 3. It is usually better to avoid direct speech, so: The witness said that the young man stuck etc.
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I adjusted my text.
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